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This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This introductory paragraph about a scientific field trip tries to establish a setting in introducing readers to the examination of a natural disaster. Unfortunately, it does so in language that interferes with the mood setting.
此篇為科學實地考察的介紹文，目的在於向讀者介紹自然災害研究。不過，作者使用的文字和語氣有所抵觸。

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This prelude to a report of an astronomy outing is appealing in its detail and drama. However, the writer lapsed into cliché and the writing falls well short of being smooth.
在細節和戲劇性方面，作者拉開一趟天文郊遊序幕的寫作手法相當吸引人。然而，作者的失敗之處在於過度陳腔濫調以及寫作內容過短。

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

The writer is guilty of questionable word choices and assumptions. The very first word in the excerpt is wrong. The records are not “historic,’’ that is, momentous in and of themselves; they are “historical,” meaning they contain history.
作者在文字的選擇和使用上犯了幾個錯誤，特別是節錄段落的第一個字就是錯的。記錄不該是「historic」；這裡應該將重點放在記錄本身，使用「historical」，表示這些記錄包括過去發生的事件。

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This paragraph contains some bad examples of writing: Wordiness…”brightly lit” instead of “bright.” Imprecision… A bag probably wasn’t shifted higher on a shoulder; the straps of the bag were.
本段出現一些寫作上的錯誤：像是贅詞，作者寫了「 brightly lit」（明亮地點亮），而不是「 bright」（明快）。還有不精確，被移到肩膀上方的不應該是包包，而是肩帶才對。

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This writer addresses an interesting subject: how private research can culminate in public acclaim. It explores some of the dynamics of popularity. However, the writer clutters the writing with extra words and unneeded phrases. For example, a “popular celebrity” is mostly a redundant expression, though it is possible for a celebrity to be unpopular.
本文討論的主題很有趣，說明私人研究如何獲得公眾注目，並探討了一些名氣的作用。然而文中堆砌了太多詞句。例如「popular celebrity」（受歡迎的名人）這句基本上有點多餘，名人怎麼會不受歡迎呢？

This is not academic writing 學術文章不是這麼寫的

【寫作技巧】

This glimpse of campus life on a pivotal autumn day is marred by failure to create a continuous thread of imagery, and by word choices that frequently are weak and clichéd. The first sentence says a seasonal change “startled” the scene. The meaning of that is difficult to grasp.
本段文章描述時序即將入秋時的校園生活一景，可惜不連貫的意像以及無力的陳詞濫調卻破壞了這幅景象。第一句提到季節的變換「startled」（驚嚇）了整個場景，文意不清。